Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce these increasing levels of crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In some nations, the everyday

crime

rate increasing. Some

people

think more

police

officers

on the street is the key to the

crime

rate. I disagree with

this

view

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because

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suggest

government

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the government

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should tighten the law. I think

this

role can reduce

crime

First

of all, In many countries

crime

is growing. Because,

people

can'

find suits

job

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jobs

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, and they won'

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learn high education but its too expensive for those

people

. So, they start committing crimes to earn money.

For example

, their loved

people

are hungry, and they don'

have any food. They start stealing food from the store. In the

beginng

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beginning

this

crime

is small but a

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few months after

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crime

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growing

in the end

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this

crime

is too big and they can'

replace what they did. Other

people

think

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they need more

police

officers

standing outside.

Thus

, they believe to reduce

crime

Thus

, criminals will start doing their crimes very secretly.

This

is bad for humanity because

police

officers

can'

find

crime

and need a long time. Some

people

are afraid of

police

officers

but others don'

Police

officers

should necessary to constantly deliver recommendations to prevent crimes before they occur. In conclusion, some countries struggled

increased

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crime

rates. But others think need for more

police

officer

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officers

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. In my opinion, if government tighten the law.

Crime

could be reduced.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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226 words

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