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Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nation. Others believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Global athletic
events
such
 as the Olympics, the World Cup, the Extreme Games, and even the American Super Bowl are incredible opportunities for countries. These iconic spectacles can provide a country with an economic avalanche of benefits or expose it to a public relations disaster.
This
 essay will look at both points, using Russia and the United Kingdom as examples.
Firstly
, it is important to bear in mind that simply hosting the event and having the world’s media attention cannot guarantee a positive promotion.
This
 is because
although
 the country is receiving enormous amounts of publicity, the media will often report controversial news as well . Take the Winter Olympics in Sochi, Russia,
for example
. The media spotlight is shining bright on the athletes but
also
 highlighting the polemic legislation regarding homosexuality.
Therefore
, despite the international recognition to be gained, the country can
also
 face a possible backlash.
Secondly
, the expense of building large infrastructures necessary to hold these
events
 can dwarf the benefits, unless they are fully amortized
afterward
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This
 is largely due to the fact that stadiums, Olympic parks, ski runs, etc. are expensive to construct and undertake large capital expenditure, often by the public sector. In the Commonwealth Games in Manchester in 2002, the council commissioned a stadium for athletic
events
 which was later adapted and sold to the local preeminent football club, Manchester City.
Therefore
 with proper, fair, economic management of
such
 buildings and,facilities, the cost can be recuperated. To conclude, a host city or nation has a lot to gain from these
events
 but only if they are economically administered correctly and the bucolic has no controversial issues for the publishing to pull out of the closet.
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