For a long time there has been concern about the quality of the food we eat because of additives and contaminants. Recently genetically modified (GM) food has become more common, causing concern. Is this concern justified or not?

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Nowadays, many people are concerned about the type and quality of the

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they consume. They claim

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that come from

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crops are harmful and

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a possibility of causing cancer.

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, there are few people who consider

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concern unjustified including myself. In

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has little to be concerned about.

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, organic

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are generally expensive. Lower yields and higher quality of crops means prices of the

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greater.

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crops have higher yields and are usually resistant to pests and drought, leading to more affordable prices.

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are beneficial in poor countries as

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less and can be grown using very little water. Whereas limited production of organic

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requires plenty of labour work and farmer’s time as well.

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, there is no solid proof that

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causes cancer or any other diseases. Several research

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been done into

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but it has not managed to confirm any harmful effects on human health.

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, some organic

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are not entirely made from organic and may contain few ingredients of

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, since organic

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do not

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long, many farmers and manufacturers use preservatives to store

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time which helps them to save money. To conclude, it is up to people to decide what

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they want and their choice of eating organic

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about

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are baseless and its positive impact outweighs the unproven negative effects.

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For a long time there has been concern about the quality of the food we eat because of additives and contaminants. Recently genetically modified (GM) food has become more common, causing concern. Is this concern justified or not?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think consumers are influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

Some people feel that entertainment (eg film stars, pop musicians and story stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of Jobs should be highly paid.

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problem are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or an negative development

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.