Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good mebers of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some argue that
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should mould youngsters on how to be
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society while others believe, it is best taught in
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of the
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are
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and they only want the best for their
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. In my opinion, nowadays, in
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, ethics subject is
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part of the curriculum where students learn and must abide
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it which is more effective in shaping them to be good members of our community. Since
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are the
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teachers and home is the
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classroom for
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to learn values and respect to be good citizens in the future.
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situation only applies to those
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who are strict when it comes to
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children
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.
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, in
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, majority of the
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are neglected because
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their
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lack
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of
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responsibility
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minors are engaging
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alcohol or drugs. In my
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,
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,
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play a vital role
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the child's development to be a good citizen of our future, it is more important that
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should be taught at
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strict
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compliance. In
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, students are taught values and ethics
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they are compelled to accomplish in order to pass. In
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way, at
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age, they will learn due to its strict adherence and it will inculcate in their young minds the good behaviour that was being taught.
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, in Japan, good moral and right conduct was incorporated centuries past and
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Japanese
good behaviours
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as being respectful and polite are something they are proud of wherever they will go. I do believe, that
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is
more
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a more
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effective way for
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to acquire good
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characteristics
for them to be
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society. In conclusion,
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are essential for the child's development
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fact they are born to be "
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"
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,
school
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is the best way for
children
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to learn good behaviour because of its strict compliance that contributes to their success to be good members of our society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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