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Many people today are choosing to live and work in another country after graduating from university in their home country. Why is this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Going abroad for
living
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a living
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 or
job
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a job
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 has been one of the most popular trends in recent years. A number of
people
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 have a tendency to live and work in a foreign country after completing
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a bachealor
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bachealor
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bachelor
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 degree in college in their motherland.
This
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behavior
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behaviour
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 provides some advantages and drawbacks will be explained below.
To begin
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 with, many
pepole
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people
 want to go
foreign
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to foreign
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 states to reach higher income than they have earned.
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, it is fact that particularly citizens of
under-developted
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under-developed
 or developing countries have looked
a
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for a
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change to go
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to devoloped
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devoloped
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developed
 parts of the world
such
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 as North America as well as Scandinavia and if they succeed
their
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in their
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 purposes which
is
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are
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 moving, they could earn
outstanding
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an outstanding
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 amount of money.
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, many well-educated
people
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 want to go
rich
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to rich
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 countries to pursue their educational aims, because these states have applied diverse opportunities
these
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to these
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community
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communities
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. In fact, not only do these countries provide funding to
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a scientist
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scientist
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scientists
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, but
also
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 they find a multicultural environment in the states they want to go
.
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to.
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Therefore
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,
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the
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possibility of reaching
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a high
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high income
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high-income
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 level and educational opportunities constitute
biggest
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the biggest
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 part of
advantages
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the advantages
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 which humans can catch.
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, there are some negative aspects
also
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 about going abroad to live or work.
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 of all, going away from family might be difficult for many young
people
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. To illustrate, a young person who has graduated from
the
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apply
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university could be just
above
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in
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twenties
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the twenties
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,
might
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and might
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 face
challenges
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the challenges
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 of living foreign country far from his parents as well as friends.
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 of all, meeting
varios
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various
 cultures could be difficult for
people
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 who have moved
another
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to another
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 state. In fact, a number of
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a citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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 who had gone
foreign
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to foreign
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country
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countries
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 have encountered some problems
about
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with
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 being part of the society which they want to
entegrate
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integrate
.
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, living far from parents or friends and
possibility
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the possibility
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 of
come
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coming
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acrossing
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across
 some keeping up with
challanges
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challenges
 in the new county account for
important
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an important
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 part of the
disadvatages
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disadvantages
 of going abroad. To sum up,
although
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 going abroad for living or
working
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work
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 ensures diverse positive opportunities like earning money more than
recent
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in recent
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 or multicultural
environment
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environments
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, there are many drawbacks
also
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such
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 as living away from family and encountering unknown customs.
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