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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements and this sets a bad example to the young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#celebrities #glamour #wealth #achievements #sets #people
It is true that most
of
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the
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celebrities
 are well known for their luxurious
lifestyle
 than for their talent or performance nowadays. The majority of
people
 believe that
this
 kind of attitude is not a good example for the younger generation. I am inclined to believe that
this
 kind of
behavior
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 would be a bad example for society.
However
, there are other famous
people
 who are popular for their outstanding acting or voice . On the one hand, it is a fact that many famous
people
 become popular due to their fancy
lifestyle
,
instead
 of their outstanding
achievement
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achievements
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 these days. Their talent might be standard or below the average, but they are making
sensation
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 to the public by showing their wealth and glamour
lifestyle
.
For example
,
famous
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 American Kardasian-Jenner family who are recognized for their reality television program. In
this
show
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 they are showing luxurious mansions, parties and
shopaholic
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lifestyle
. It is believed that
such
behavior
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 would have
negative
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 influence
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the
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young
people
 and teach them
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 style of life.
On the other hand
, there are
celebrities
 who are popular for their incredible acting or
stanning
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stunning
 voice. These
people
 have shown to the world that they have achieved success due to strong determination and diligence, and the public will always remember them for their
masterpiece
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masterpieces
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 and great achievements.
For instance
, actor and producer Jim Carrey
is
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 famous for his rubbery body movements and flexible facial expressions. Before getting the lead role and becoming famous, countless failures were waiting for him. Despite all
this
, he did not give up and now he is one of the most popular
comedian
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 actors today. In conclusion, even if there are several
celebrities
 who are well known for their wealth, expensive apartments and fancy style of life, there are other
celebrities
 who are famous due to their great talent. In my opinion, I think the public should be more selective in choosing their role models, not just in front of the camera, but we should
also
 see
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their personal life as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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