Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures

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Nowadays,
children
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are facing more pressures nowadays from
academic
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academics
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, due to frequently using mobile electronic devices.
Parents
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are not giving good upbringing to
children
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.
Their
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are
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currently busy in their occupation. Technology
have
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made
this
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world insane.
Children
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don't have good company their company is making them spoil.
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, getting admission to
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in
good
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school
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is
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responsible
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of
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parents
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. In recent times movies are being of sexual ways if
children
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watches
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that
in
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tv. In early
childhood
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their mind
is
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easily gets mental trauma.
Parents
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should
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be careful what their child is watching on tv and
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be aware
of their company.
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, education
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also
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become much burden on
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children
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ability to read
write
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and write
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. School
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and college
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college
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colleges
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are teaching
unnessary
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unnecessary
stuff to
children
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their
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should teach what
in
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require
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for
children
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in future. In current, times
parents
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are getting much
harsh
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with their
children
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too
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to
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study well. If once
children
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do not get good marks their scold
unncessary
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unnecessary
.
Parents
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will always compare their
child
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children
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with other
children
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.
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,
parents
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do not see what their
children
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have
passion
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a passion
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to become.
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parents
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wants their
children
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to become engineer and doctor.
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, their
children
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have
passion
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a passion
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to become
cricketer
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cricketers
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or
musician
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musicians
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressure
  • globalized world
  • competitive education system
  • social media influences
  • cyberbullying
  • commercial pressures
  • aggressive marketing
  • materialistic desires
  • peer pressure
  • high expectations
  • standardized testing
  • quantifiable performance
  • stress and anxiety
  • extracurricular achievements
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