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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures

#children #pressures #perspectives #measures
Nowadays,
children
 are facing more pressures nowadays from
academic
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academics
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, due to frequently using mobile electronic devices.
Parents
 are not giving good upbringing to
children
.
Their
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They
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 are
also
 currently busy in their occupation. Technology
have
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 made
this
 world insane.
Children
 don't have good company their company is making them spoil.
Moreover
, getting admission to
children
 in
good
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a good
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school
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schools
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 is
also
responsible
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of
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for
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parents
. In recent times movies are being of sexual ways if
children
watches
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watch
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 that
in
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on
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 tv. In early
childhood
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,childhood
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 their mind
is
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easily gets mental trauma.
Parents
 should
also
 be careful what their child is watching on tv and
beaware
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be aware
 of their company.
However
, education
is
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also becomes
has also become
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also
 become much burden on
children
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children's
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 ability to read
write
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and write
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. School
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and college
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college
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colleges
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 are teaching
unnessary
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unnecessary
 stuff to
children
their
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there
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 should teach what
in
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is
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require
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required
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 for
children
 in future. In current, times
parents
 are getting much
harsh
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more harsh
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 with their
children
too
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to
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 study well. If once
children
 do not get good marks their scold
unncessary
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unnecessary
.
Parents
 will always compare their
child
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children
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 with other
children
.
Additionally
,
parents
 do not see what their
children
 have
passion
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a passion
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 to become.
Like
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Parents
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parents
 wants their
children
 to become engineer and doctor.
Nevertheless
, their
children
 have
passion
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a passion
the passion
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 to become
cricketer
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cricketers
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 or
musician
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musicians
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.
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