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Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

#media #influence #consumers
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The problem of whether or not social
networks
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 advertisements reflect on
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 of customers has been raised for
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 period of time. While most
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people
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the people
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 aspire to believe that contemporary media does not
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on
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what consumers buy, I do not completely accord with
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 opinion for several reasons. To embark on, today it has habitual for people to be bombarded with myriad kinds of information
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 the global net.
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 trend has both positive and negative
impact
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 on people’s
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. It seems logical that in order to get significant profit stuff of sellers would create attractive advertisements that increase the number of buyers. Due to
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fact
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 consumers make
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irrational decision and encounter numerous issues related to financial stability in their lives. A good illustration of
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 is shopaholics, who in pursuit of something new, forget about the meaning and
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 impulsive
purchase
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,
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 illiteracy in own financial condition. Another cogent reason is
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the importance
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 and crucial meaning of
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marketing, that profound
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 attracting dwellers. It is claimed that the essential goal of
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 on creating conditions, which will show an upward trend
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sales. When the issue is looked
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 point, it seems comprehensible that social media, where
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 certain part of marketing is posted, play
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 vital role in the business. To conclude, some people argue that Internet marketing does not
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on
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our
behavior
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 during
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purchasing.
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, recognizing
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 idea of advertising, it becomes easy to crack that marketing of social media fundamentally influence
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us and on what we buy.
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