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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #ebooks #technology #newspaper #magazines
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The problem of whether or not modern technology should replace traditional
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 and magazines has sparked a heated debate. While some
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 argue that paper
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 are more
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convenient
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, I contend that digital versions would lead to
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a positive
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 impact on
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 of society. There are two main reasons why
people
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 suggest that traditional
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 of getting news are more comfortable. One of them is that older
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 are
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 used to
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 paper variants. Another cogent reason is that
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 way of getting information doesn't need
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 internet connection and can be used anywhere. I personally believe that
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 way of reading news is relatively positive for several reasons
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the main one being that it is free and can be viewed by anyone.
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, the most recent and fresh news always
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 on the websites.
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, according to
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 survey conducted by Harvard university, more and more
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 give their preference to digital sources of information. In conclusion, I believe, the notion of
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 using modern technologies is indeed good but using newspapers and magazines should be given to provide
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 generation opportunity to get the information.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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