Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.
It has been argued that social media sites could affect in a negative way
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essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using social networks and the consequences of young people's behaviour, which from my point of view are more damaging than beneficial.
In the first instance, social media could be considered positive for several reasons. It allows shy people to meet and make new friends. Linking Words
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, is a good way to get in contact with the population from other countries and connect with other cultures. Linking Words
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, it is a good solution if, Linking Words
for example
, you have a long-distance relationship and you want to stay in contact with your partner.
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In contrast
, there are a large number of disadvantages that we have to take into account. Teenagers are in a really important stage of their lives, they need to learn how to develop healthy relationships, and how to improve their social skills. If they just use social apps and do not do other activities, it could lead to a lack of social development. Linking Words
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, another of the most dangerous consequences of excessive use of social networks is addiction. Linking Words
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, it has been claimed that most teenagers have the habit of scrolling on their phones when they Linking Words
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In conclusion, social media could be very positive if we use it in the right way, with control and moderation, but, despite Rephrase
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, it is better to encourage youth to develop other healthy social habits in order to lead them to improve their communication and emotional skills.Linking Words
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