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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies?

#countries #people #work #travel #year #school #university #studies
In the contemporary ,world more and more teenagers acquiesce
with
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 the fact that spending their time earning money and gaining
skill
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 through discovering a new country during a gap year after graduating from high school is a better way to have
experience
 than
university
.
On the other hand
,
majority
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 of parents are considering
this
as
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a waste of time with
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 main reason that
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 of getting
highly
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 paid and decent job is relatively high with
diploma
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. The dispute has sparked a heated debate among people
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 while having pros and cons on
the
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both sides of the equation.
However
, I am strongly convinced that taking a gap year would lead to
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 positive impact on a student’s ability to adapt
in
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 a real-life situation and can make a huge difference in either personal or professional skills. There are several cogent reasons why proponents of a conventional way of building
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 claim that it is better to study at a
university
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 main one being that in the past individuals could have a satisfying salary only by having a
university
 degree. In fact,
this
 way is old-fashioned and doesn’t guarantee that you would get it that easy, even after finishing
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top-
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university
 in your country. In my point of view, employers demand
experience
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 of the possible worker more than the education he or she has. I contend that the best scenario after finishing
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school is to try yourself in different and distinct spheres
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 while getting priceless
experience
 and chasing the field in which a person is interested.
Also
,
advantage
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the advantage
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 of taking a free year could help to relieve
a
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stress after an underestimated load of study. According to Harvard
university
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 about
one
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third
 of students
experience
 severe depression due to school exams.
Suicides
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 is flourishing by leaps and bounds due to an
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lifestyle
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life-style
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 which students often have In
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 I believe that
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 that people ought to have at least a
bachelor
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 degree is indeed positive, but recognizing the importance of relaxing and gaining
experience
, it is significant to encourage graduates to be wiser about their choice.
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  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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