some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important and valuable to be shared freely. discuss both views and give your own opinion. answer:
People
have different views about the importance of sharing information
some people
argue that sharing significant information
in different Fields can be effective while others opposed to share
Change the verb form
sharing
on page
Add a hyphen
on-page
data
with other people
I believe that appreciate
Wrong verb form
appreciating
information
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
shared
with Add a missing verb
is shared
people
in a free we can be useful .
Firstly
, the word
Correct your spelling
world
have
become modern Change the verb form
has
everyday
. Correct your spelling
every day
Although
at the same time
Add a comma
,time
people
's knowledge
is booming but
there are many advantages Remove the conjunction
apply
in
sharing updated Change preposition
to
information
. People
can improve and develop their knowledge
about many different subjects such
is
medicine , science , technology and so on . In some Correct your spelling
as
cases
unpaid Add a comma
,cases
information
can help people
in many ways especially
on social media and the internet. It opens up practical opportunities for each member Add the comma(s)
,especially
in
society to attain a new skill by searching Change preposition
of
new
Change preposition
for new
data
about it. Likewise
Add a comma
,Likewise
people
can be aware of great subjects like Healthcare , sort of disease
, hygiene and other stuff by getting Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
data
from many sources . Society can make progress in the level of success .
On the other hand
, obviously
there is some Add a comma
,obviously
information
on the internet which can be harmful for
others. These are the dangerous things that can affect badly on Change the preposition
to
people
's life such
as the formula of a kind of poison or many toxic staffs . Some of them are related to professional
Correct article usage
the professional
sides
of Science and should not be allowed available easily for all Fix the agreement mistake
side
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
people
. Also
in some cases
some Add a comma
,cases
people
can steal valuable ideas and opinions that are very fancy for big projects for companies . They can use it in their own way and label it Change preposition
as being
being
for themselves .
In conclusion, in my view Change the form of the verb
is
piece
of Correct article usage
a piece
information
which is practical and well-educated to everyone should be free and available as much as possible . It can bring benefits for people
to improve their knowledge
. However
giving Add a comma
,However
knowledge
or data
can affect everyone's live
whether how they use it in a good or bad way.Replace the word
life
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