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fast food cheaper advantages overweigh the disadvantages

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Junk
food
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 is inexpensive. Rich
food
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 is not good for health.
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, it can boost
up
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people
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people's
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 confidence. There are both merits and demerits
of
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to
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this
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 argument. From my perspective,
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 are more which surpass the advantages. One of the
negative
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 is
to eat
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eating
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 fast
food
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 containing a lot of
calorie
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calories
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. Not only that fat elements remain at the same time but
also
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it
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apply
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contains adequate toxin.
The eating
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Eating
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 substances which carry too much
carbo-hydrate
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carbohydrate
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 can lead a human to obesity. As rich meals are sold
in
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at
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 a very cheap rate it will be possible for
person
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a person
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 easily.
For instance
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, the burger is low cost compared to the other foods and a human
preffers
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prefers
 it very much. Eating frequently can reach them to
the
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apply
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death. Despite the negative side, rich eating substances have some vegetarian items which can create protective things in
human
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the human
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 body. They can provide preventive materials which can fight for the body.
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, it can cover two types of
meal
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meals
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. There is no hassle to make
by
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it by
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ownself
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yourself
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 as it is
a
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apply
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readymade
food
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.
Person
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A person
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 can save
their
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apply
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time by buying
this
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 as it is cheap.
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, a man or woman can purchase fast
food
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 as it is a very inexpensive meal. He or she can easily arrange it as there is no hinder. In conclusion, if fast
food
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 is cheap it can create sufficient harmful substances in
human
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the human
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 body.
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, it can save people time. I am in my opinion, junk meal contains drawback more which outrace
its
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their
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 useful side.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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