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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #teenagers #community #work #time #benefit
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Nowadays young people have a huge variety of opportunities how to spend their spare
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, but not all of them are useful, and
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, some of them might be detrimental.
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, some people think that it is highly important to force teenagers to do unpaid
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 in their free
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 for local communities. I strongly believe, that
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 an activity can be beneficial for neither teenagers nor local communities.
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 of all, when we talk about unpaid activity, it should be mentioned that
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 could be done perfectly and effectively only by volunteers, who are keen on doing it and have enough passion for it. Those who were obliged to
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 for free will not have any motivation to do it well and will try to skip it by any available means.
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, no important skills will be developed by young men, and at the end of the day with a high probability
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 attempt will be a complete and utter waste of
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 for them.
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 the fact that
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 practice is useless for youngsters, it might be detrimental to local communities as well. In most cases, community
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 means some unqualified, boring, and repetitive actions,
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 as helping old and impaired members of the community and cleaning parks or public spaces. These types of activities are strongly connected with local citizens and have a great impact on their moods.
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 why completing it in an inappropriate and ineffective way will provide nothing but harm and disappointment. To conclude, I definitely disagree with those who think obliging teenagers to do unpaid community
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 in their spare
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 is a good idea. Because working without any motivation, no matter financial or non-financial, can not be done well,
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 will provide any benefit neither those who did it no ultimately beneficiary of it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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