Some people think that criminal behavior can have genetic reasons, while others believe that only circumstances can lead some people to crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some of us believe that criminal
behavior
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is
due to
genetic
reasons
,
although
others think that it is because of the circumstances that lead to crime. There could be many
reasons
for criminals to opt for crimes. Mostly, the situational
reasons
have been more evident in
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of the criminal
behavior
than the heredity of the lawbreaker. I opined that events can cause criminal
behavior
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.
This
essay will analyse both
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reasons
with regard to
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of criminal
behavior
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. First of all,
myriad
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of individuals feel that the circumstances of the offender can lead to crimes. People suffering from poverty are mostly seen
involved
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as involved
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in different
offence
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offences
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. The lack of resources
trigger
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them to commit a crime to
meet their
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ends meet.
For instance
, a pickpocketer is compelled to pick
someones'
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pocket to sustain his life. It is rarely seen
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well earning
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member of
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society to indulge in
such
activities.
Hence
, if a
persons'
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person's
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fundamental needs are fulfilled
then
the chances of getting absorbed in
such
misconduct would be probably low.
Conversely
, other
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of the population
consider
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otherwise
,
that
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means they primarily blame the genes for
such
behavior
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behaviour
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. They feel that
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attitude is acquired through your parents. To illustrate, a child will learn
such
behavior
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behaviour
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at his home by looking at his father. The
enviroment
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environment
at the house will teach
such
misdeed
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misdeeds
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to the child in an implicit manner.
However
, I strongly believe that the
upringing
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upbringing
plays a major role here irrespective of the occupation of
father
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the father
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. The parents may try to fix the situations for their children so that, they should not end up in
such
offensive
behavior
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behaviour
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. In
this
case, the parents will ensure to provide
good
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education to their children which will make them
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civilised
member
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members
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of
the
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society.
To conclude
, the
reasons
for a person to
go for
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such
crime
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are varied. It is argued that there could be personal or genetic
reasons
behind it. But, I would stand at a point that it
the
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individuals
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individual's
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conscience to choose between the right and wrong path.
Therefore
, you may see your family conducting misdeeds and
hence
would be aversed to it.
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