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Band 6

You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your letter: give details of the purchase explain the problem explain why you need a replacement urgently You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam..........,

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to request a replacement for a
shirt
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 that I purchased recently online. I probably look for a dress which gives me a comfortable fit. Usually, a
shirt
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size
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 of 42 CM is my exact
size
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. Recently, I saw a beautiful, red coloured, double-pocket
shirt
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 online. I checked the
size
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 table provided with the item, I chose the convenient
size
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, and
then
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 I made the order. Unfortunately, the delivered item was not in my exact
size
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, it was
too short
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shorter
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 than what I expected
while
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 ordering. I have a marriage function next week. But, in
this
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 condition, the
shirt
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 is unsuitable to wear.
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, I kindly request you to make an immediate arrangement for the replacement of the item. I would be grateful if you could consider my request and do the needful immediately. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully,

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task response
Task response: Add a bit more detail about the order, like the date, item name, or order number.
task response
Task response: Say more clearly why you need the new shirt soon, for example the date of the wedding.
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Task response: Use a more formal tone. Write 'I would like to request a replacement' instead of 'I probably look for a dress'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some ideas are not easy to follow. Keep the story in time order from buying to problem to request.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple linking words like 'First', 'However', and 'Therefore' to connect ideas better.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Make one clear main idea in each paragraph and avoid extra or unclear lines.
task response
Task response: You answered all three parts of the task.
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Task response: Your purpose is clear. You want a replacement.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your closing is polite and suitable for a formal letter.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • order number
  • online store
  • receipt
  • size
  • colour
  • damaged
  • wrong item
  • replace
  • return
  • urgent
  • delivery
  • customer service
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