In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

The convenience of modern transportation shortens the distance between places and people embark to go vacation abroad more frequently than it has ever been, whether travelling domestically or abroad becomes another dilemma when
plan
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a trip. A short joy domestic
travel
seems optimistic for the masses.
However
, exotic
culture
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cultures
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and various
weather
that are offered when travelling
to
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somewhere will never be found in
travel
at
home
. I strongly disagree that more people will choose to spend their holiday at
home
instead
of abroad. Compared with domestic travelling, overseas
travel
seems irreplaceable in terms of exotic
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experience
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which only available at the place of origin,
for example
, folk music and operas will be exclusively presented locally,
such
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and such
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distinctive
culture
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shows are barely found in domestic
travel
. In
this
case, it is clear that experiencing
such
a
wonderfull
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wonderful
wonderfully
different moment when spending
a
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time
in
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somewhere cannot be replaced by any trip
at
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home
. Apart from
culture
, the differences in
weather
will not be observed in
home
travelhome
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travel home
travel
,
for example
, tropical
weather
drastically differs from desert
weather
which results in the diversification of plants and animals.
Experience
in various
weather
and environment undoubtedly brings brand-new recognition of the world,
such
recognition cannot be achieved easily in
home
travelling,
thus
travelling abroad will be the only option for those who
travel
to retain more recognition of the world. In conclusion, the extraordinary
of
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culture
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experience
and diversification of the environment under various
weather
undeniably add
the
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joy we have ever
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at
home
. For
such
reasons, it is totally clear that
travel
abroad will remain trending and the replacement of domestic travelling
to
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going abroad will not be realized.
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  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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