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Students today can easily access information online . so libraries are no longer necessary.Do you agree or disagree?

#students #access #information #libraries
Students
 can now easily access information on the internet;
however
, I believe
libraries
 play an important role in society and for
students
, so their continued existence is essential. On the one hand, many
libraries
 have become multiservice
centers
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 rather than places for book reading and lending. The advancement of technology has had an impact on the improvement of library services,
such
 as providing computer
service
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, IT
service
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, job vacancy notices, and government advertisements. In spite of
abundance
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the abundance
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 of smart
device
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amoung
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among
 the
students
,
other group
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 of people
have
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 not computers or smart devices.
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consequently
consequenlgy
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Consequently
 they often use
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library
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libary
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library
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 the internet
However
, despite the ease of access to the internet, reading ebooks, magazines, and newspapers still requires a monthly subscription, or readers must pay when they download them.Many
students
,
however
, cannot afford those costs because they already have to pay tuition, and while many ebooks can be pirated, users can be prosecuted because they are protected as intellectual property.In contacts,
libraries
 offer free or low-cost subscriptions;
additionally
,
books
 that are essential for studies may not be available online due to restrictions.There are many rare
books
 in the reference section of
libraries
.
Libraries
 are used not only by
students
, but
also
 by the elderly and others; the older generation has a book culture, shares
books
, discusses novel friction, and spends their free time reading
books
 and magazines in
libraries
 with their counterparts; it is
also
 a place where people who are interested in reading
books
 can meet.
As a result
, if librarians are depressed, it can have a negative physiological impact on them. In conclusion,
libraries
 provide many resources to the community, as well as rare
books
 that are not available online;
additionally
, it is a
place
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 where people with similar interests can meet;
thus
, I believe
libraries
 should exist.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible information
  • online databases
  • e-books
  • educational websites
  • community centers
  • physical books
  • literacy programs
  • peer-reviewed resources
  • misleading information
  • digital divide
  • high-speed internet
  • underprivileged communities
  • custodians of culture
  • archival material
  • conducive environment
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