Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. What are your opinions on this?

In today's ,era there are no
children
who do not play
games
because the parents can not control their
children
on what kind of
games
they play, so most of the
games
consist of
violence
.
However
, I do not think that violent
games
played by
children
are the
reason
for the increase in
violence
and
crime
in megacities around the world, because almost all
crimes
are committed by adults who have nothing to do with violent
games
and by people who have a mental health problem. It is evident that
crimes
are committed by adults, not by
children
, so
children
playing violent
games
have nothing to do with the increase in
crime
. The
reason
for the
crime
might be absolutely another because there are a lot of
problems
besides
games
, it can be difficult childhood or any
problems
with personal life.
For example
, when I read information about committed
crimes
, I look at the
reason
and it is always related to their personal
problems
, and it is not because of
games
. Looking at the statistics of the
crimes
, we can find that the majority of them were committed due to mental health
problems
. Violent
games
affect
children
's mental health, but not so much that they can lead to
crime
. If it is really led to committing a
crime
, It would be forbidden for play.
For example
, I played a lot of
games
in childhood, some of them consisted of
violence
, but I did not pay attention to it like many other
children
, so I believe that it is not a
reason
for the
crime
.  To conclude, the increase in
crime
and
violence
is not caused by playing violent
games
, because it does not lead to committing a
crime
, since
children
do not pay much attention to it.
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