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Nowadays, eating habits of people aroud the world are chaging causing them many health problem including obesity . Why do people tend to eat so badly? What can be done to improve their eating habits?

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In recent years, the frequency and the
amount
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 of food that people eat have been increasing rapidly. These changings could lead people to experience
diet related
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 diseases
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 as obesity and diabetes. In
this
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essay
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,essay
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 I will discuss the potential causes and solutions of
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 event.
Firstly
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, one of the key contributing factors to
obssesive
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obsessive
 eating
habits
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 is the increased intake of sugary products. These days, the variety of foods rich in
sugar
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 including cakes, cookies and snacks is getting wider. It is known that frequent intake of simple carbohydrates
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 as glucose, could lead people to
sugar
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 addiction same as nicotine and caffeine. If we eat a significant
amount
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 of sugary products frequently, we would become addicted to
sugar
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.
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, we will tend to eat foods more frequently which might alter our metabolism.
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, by simply reducing the
amount
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 of
sugar
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 intake we can improve our eating
habits
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. If we will get used to eating 3 main meals with less
amount
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 of carbohydrates a day, we would not face any unhealthy eating
habits
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.
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, eating more beneficial
sugar
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such
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 as
fiber
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 will lead us to
more
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a more
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 healthy balanced diet.
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, it prevents
from
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apply
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diseases
such
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 as diabetes and
overweight
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being overweight
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. Controlling our frequency and being aware of advantageous
nutritions
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nutrition
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 will be the major solution to detrimental eating
habits
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. In conclusion,
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 essay has discussed excessive
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amount
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amounts
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 of sugary products could be
the
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an
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 impactful reason for increased eating
habits
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 and the main solution
of
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this
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 situation could be
balanced
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a balanced
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 diet and reduced sugars in foods we eat every day.
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