Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and work of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree?

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with
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for seeing
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historical objects
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about
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it is very essential to know the old history and art
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.
Childrean
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of information from the museum and art galleries.
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student can understand the way of art and how can improve themself, they will take
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of old historical and cultural facts from
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some of the inside
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will apply
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or
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practical
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knowledge.
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era of technology because people are
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object
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital mediums
  • Curated experiences
  • Cultural heritage
  • Art appreciation
  • Personal engagement
  • Cultural exchange
  • Preservation and protection
  • Atmosphere
  • Interactive exhibits
  • Educational value
  • Virtual tours
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