Some People Say Parent Should Not Allow Children To Do Activities Which Could Be Dangerous | do you agree or disagree

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argument over the
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that
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of
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said that guardians should not
preffered
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preferred
to do
activities
.Which could be dangerous.I fully agree with
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mentioned
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conclusion in
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paragraph. There
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adiquate
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adequate
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view which are
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substantial
.The
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one is nowadays
leraners
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learners
have more creucity to do some dangerous
activities
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,
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etc.Alternatively now
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of childrens
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childrens
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children
also
like to do
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participating
in some dangerous
activities
on
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plays.so,they put their
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in danger.
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research found that
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of people die in firework activity
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kusu island.
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guardians have to teach
thier
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their
childrens
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children
to avoid
dangrous
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dangerous
activities
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should
also
have to take some steps
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like that kind of activity.
however
goverments
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governments
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street dangerous organisation.
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in school teacher must have to teach them good
activities
rather than
daangerous
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dangerous
activity . To conclude all
activities
have to experience in life but before
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any dangerous things
childrens
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children
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have to think about their parents .
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