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some people say that it's better to teach language students in small classes, whereas others think the number of people does not matter. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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More and more young
people
 from wealthy
countries
 are spending time in
communities
 in poorer
countries
 doing unpaid work
such
 as teaching or building houses. Why is
this
? Who benefits from
this
, the
communities
 or these young
people
? In the contemporary age, increasingly more
people
 from industrialized nations are travelling to undeveloped parts of the world as
volunteers
 to assist with education and construction. I personally believe that
this
 phenomenon is of great benefit to both young individuals and the
communities
 they work in. In
this
 essay, certain reasons will be introduced which might explain their motivation.
First
 of all, the primary motive behind
people
’s interest in
such
 unpaid work could be to make a difference in the world we live in.
Moreover
, these
volunteers
 feel that they are contributing to bettering someone’s life by helping erect houses or educating children in struggling
countries
.
Hence
, that makes them feel
happiness
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. At the same time, another reason might be their personal gains, as they want to volunteer for the sake of improving their educational or career opportunities.
For example
, top universities like Harvard and Cambridge receive many thousands of applications from students with excellent academic background and straight-As, yet they accept only a small proportion of them, who stands out with what they have done extra,
such
 as volunteering.
This
 means that volunteering experience can give a person chance to develop a competitive edge over others.
Secondly
, unpaid service of
this
 kind is extremely beneficial for both recipient
communities
 as well as
volunteers
. It is true that the literacy levels of some
countries
 are low, so these
countries
 are in dire need of education
by
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 volunteering. Assistance by
volunteers
 in those areas is going to help improve
life
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living
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 conditions
,
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 since governments are simply to provide
themselves
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for themselves
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.
For instance
, there are volunteering
centers
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 in almost
each
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every
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 country and at the same time, the number of youth is increasing, who
wants
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 to live and help in those
countries
,
such
 as Africa and Somalia. To sum up, the reasons that drive young
people
 to do unpaid community service in nations with financial shortages are considered
as
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humanitarian and personal intuition.
Thus
,
this
 deed might be advantageous for both parties involved. 328 words.
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