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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. While others think it is a waste of money. What is your opinion on this?

#people #clothes #waste #money
Since the production of
clothes
 and the fashion industry has grown up in a vast majority of
countries
, people enjoy buying and wearing fashionable
clothes
. But a number of people insist that purchasing new
clothes
 are waste of money. In my case, I enjoy purchasing new wear, which is unique and fashionable. I usually buy wears from ZARA and Uniqlo, which are fast fashion companies. Those companies' products are usually price-affordable and unique, which is the reason why many people buy them. But suddenly when I tidy up my closet
last
 week, I was totally surprised because there were so many old
clothes
 that I bought was not been worn for a year. I suddenly realised the reason why I am poor and promised myself that I should not buy too many wears.
Also
, the
clothes
 that I have thrown away will be trash and will give a harmful effect on our nature. Most undeveloped
countries
 suffer from the old
clothes
 problem. Most developed
countries
 sell old
clothes
 to undeveloped
countries
 and most of the
clothes
 are total trash.
That is
 why our thrown
clothes
 are harming the Earth's environment. The fewer wears we buy, we can save our cash and preserve nature. In conclusion, Since the production of
clothes
 and fashion items grow up, the amount of trash will increase together. To preserve our nature and save money we should buy new
clothes
 as less as possible and buy
second
-hand wear. Those are usually price-affordable and do not harm the environment.
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