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some people think that children under 18 years old should receive full-time education. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #children #years #education
Some people argue that adults should take
full
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time
education
. So
in my opinion
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 it has negative and positive sides too. On the one hand, taking
full
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time
education
 for adults has big disadvantages.
For
instance
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 when they are
studied
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 from the early years they will
tired
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 and
then
 they are trying to get rid of the stress which is
taking
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 by hard studying.
However
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 by consequences of
the
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apply
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full
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full-time
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time
education
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 they lost their childhood. I mean that
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time
education
 takes a lot of
time
.
On the other
hand
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 taking
full
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time
education
 has a handful
advantages
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. By taking
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full
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time
education
 it would be easy to achieve
to
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success for happily married in the future.
Also
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 they have experience at their job in the future. In conclusion, taking the
time
education
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to education
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 has
own
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its own
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 advantages and disadvantages too. It would be better to have free choice.
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