Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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has been a major cause of several non-communicable diseases for years.

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, there are still many manufactured food and beverage

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that contain high-level of sugars on the market. Some

people

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believe that making these

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more expensive will lessen the number of

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consuming them. In

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essay, I will explain why I agree with

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statement.

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, a high daily intake of

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could lead to a high level of glucose in the human blood system.

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may cause several chronic diseases

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as Diabetes Mellitus, Chronic Kidney Disease, and Heart Failure; which eventually can cause death.

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, by making manufactured food and drink

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overpriced,

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would re-think buying these goods.

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will unconsciously encourage

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to manage their health more.

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, if these sugary

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cost two times higher than a glass of fresh fruit juice,

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will choose to buy the juice more than the manufactured ones.

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, the government should put sugary food and drink tax on these

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, other than making a

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tax, the government can come up with a new policy about the maximum daily nutritional intake. Manufacturers are prohibited to produce

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that are surpassing the borderline of the daily recommendations.

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, if the maximum

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level of 100ml beverages is 2gr,

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that are higher than

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number would never get the permit to enter the market.

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, the manufacturers will have no choice but comply. In conclusion, the idea of making sugary

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cost more is effective in preventing serious health problems.

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, the government can control

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's daily intake in several ways.

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, I think it is essential for

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to put more attention to their own health conditions.

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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway line for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both themanyse views and give you own opinion

ome people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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