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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Sugar
 has been a major cause of several non-communicable diseases for years.
However
, there are still many manufactured food and beverage
products
 that contain high-level of sugars on the market. Some
people
 believe that making these
products
 more expensive will lessen the number of
people
 consuming them. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I agree with
this
 statement.
First
, a high daily intake of
sugar
 could lead to a high level of glucose in the human blood system.
This
 may cause several chronic diseases
such
 as Diabetes Mellitus, Chronic Kidney Disease, and Heart Failure; which eventually can cause death.
Thus
, by making manufactured food and drink
products
 overpriced,
people
 would re-think buying these goods.
This
 will unconsciously encourage
people
 to manage their health more.
For instance
, if these sugary
products
 cost two times higher than a glass of fresh fruit juice,
people
 will choose to buy the juice more than the manufactured ones.
Thus
, the government should put sugary food and drink tax on these
products
.
However
, other than making a
sugar
 tax, the government can come up with a new policy about the maximum daily nutritional intake. Manufacturers are prohibited to produce
products
 that are surpassing the borderline of the daily recommendations.
For example
, if the maximum
sugar
 level of 100ml beverages is 2gr,
products
 that are higher than
this
 number would never get the permit to enter the market.
Consequently
, the manufacturers will have no choice but comply. In conclusion, the idea of making sugary
products
 cost more is effective in preventing serious health problems.
In addition
, the government can control
people
's daily intake in several ways.
However
, I think it is essential for
people
 to put more attention to their own health conditions.
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