In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree

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indicates genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Arts are about intangible and tangible products, which play an important role in healing people's souls, it might not be an

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painting or a historical sonate, sometimes, just some soft melody can be so touching and make you feel better.

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In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree

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