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Writing Samples
Band 7

You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter Describe the item Explain where and when you left it Say what action you would like the company to take Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing you
this
 letter to inform you that I have lost my luggage and ask for your help.
Last
 week, on April 22, I was
traveling
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travelling
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 by train number 1A and got off at Lesnaya station to pick up my suitcase from the storage room.
However
, when I opened the safe, my suitcase was not there. Apparently, I was sad and could not
fast
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quickly
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 find the administrator
that
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who
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understand
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understood
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 the reason for the loss because the train stopped for 10 minutes. I ask you to help me solve
this
 problem and find my luggage. Perhaps there are some surveillance cameras and they can be used to track where the suitcase disappeared. I have all the payment checks and I can send them to you.
This
 is very important to me and I hope that you will answer me as soon as possible. Best regards, Vladimir Belik
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task achievement
The letter does not clearly specify what the lost item is. It only mentions 'luggage' and 'suitcase,' but doesn't describe it, as requested.
task achievement
Consider providing more precise details about the timing and location of where the item was lost to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
The letter opens with a clear greeting and concludes with a respectful closing; this reflects effective communication skills.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the letter is logical, and ideas are organized well into paragraphs, making the letter easy to read.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable item
  • distinctive features
  • left behind
  • compartment
  • last seen
  • retrieved
  • item description
  • identifying information
  • contact
  • lost and found
  • appropriate department
  • expeditious
  • immediate assistance
  • trace
  • recovery
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