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As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that drivers should cover the costs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is an undeniable fact that the usage of
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the automobile
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automobile
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 has been surging over
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recent years.
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, some
people
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 argue that the
government
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 should effectively invest
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road
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 system to make it better, while others opine that it is the responsibility of car owners. The following essay will illustrate both views and I am personally inclined toward the latter viewpoint.
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 often argued that the drivers who are driving the vehicles have to consider all
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 of expenses to enhance
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road
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services
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.
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, money can be utilized to develop wider routes by building more driving lanes so that traffic congestion can be reduced.
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, the
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 are taking complete
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 of
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the city’s
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services
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 and
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 they need to assimilate financially with
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government
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.
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, some individuals think that the authority of a specific city or country
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 a prime role
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 the infrastructure of the
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 system because most
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people
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 pay a large amount of taxes every year to
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government
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. As a consequence, it is only the authorities’ responsibility to pay back to their
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 by providing
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various
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facilities
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 like the advanced
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 system for
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convenient transportation, not the
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. I firmly believe that the authority must have spent money for the advancement of
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services
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 like transportation because they are already obtaining a considerable amount from their
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 in terms of taxation. In conclusion, it is worth noting that the
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 is bound to expand
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services
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 because indirectly they receive currency from the
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 the consumption of vehicles can be decreased by
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 if other types of transportation
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 can be facilitated.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equitable access
  • public service
  • comprehensive planning
  • financial burden
  • user-pay principle
  • traffic congestion
  • encourage sustainable transportation
  • fair distribution of costs
  • direct benefit
  • road taxes
  • tolls
  • revenue
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