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. In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea?

#countries #teenagers #jobs #students #idea
School and college time is the most demanding period in
lifetime
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 in different ways including financial
aspect
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, but
also
 mental effort. I think that working due
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 studies can have more advantages than disadvantages for the person. Having
job
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 during
the
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schooling
require
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 a lot of devotion and additional effort from
student
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a student
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 in the order to
acomplish
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accomplish
 tasks on both sides. The fact that
this
 can be very mentally and
physicly
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physically
exhausing
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exhausting
 can impact
on
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her
perfomance
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performance
 and results
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 both, school and
job
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.
Although
 these negative aspects of
mentioned
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 situation are not
negliglible
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negligible
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, I think that working and
studing
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studying
 can bring
mutal
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mutual
 benefits to
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one.
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A student
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Student
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Students
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that
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 work can contribute to
her
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their
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 expenses with
her
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their
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 own salary, which would not just
financially
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 help
to
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her
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 parents, but
also
 teach
her
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them
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 how to manage
her
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 money expenditure and costs.
This
also
 can help the person to improve her organizational skills due to
the
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multitasking, but
also
 to
learn
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 prioritize duties.
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, people that start to work earlier have
better
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 chance to get good working placement after graduation because of their experience and improved CV. In conclusion, in order to achieve better skills in their future life and become more competitive
on
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 the job market, one should work during her studies,
although
 that can require additional energy and constant personal growth.
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