A person’s health is their own responsibility rather than the government’s responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Good
health
is the most valuable possession that a person owns. Some believe that each one must take care of their wellness and not the government. I partly agree with Use synonyms
this
statement and Linking Words
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essay will explain why.
A major reason why I think Linking Words
this
is that we know our bodies better than anyone else. Linking Words
In other words
, the general human anatomy could be the same for everyone but the way each body works is totally different. We have the responsibility of having a healthy lifestyle. Linking Words
Consequently
, we must be concerned about what we eat and if we exercise every day. The population have to avoid the main diseases caused by not having correct habits of life. Linking Words
For example
, it is recommended to walk at least ten thousand steps every day Linking Words
for having
an active life. Change preposition
to have
However
, there are Linking Words
health
problems that must be managed by the administration.
The role of public services should be to manage properly the Use synonyms
health
system and emergencies. They have to ensure that everyone has free access to medical treatments because, in my opinion, the well-being of people should not be a business. Use synonyms
Also
, even if citizens take care of themselves, there are cases Linking Words
that
Change preposition
in
it
is necessary for the intervention of the government to stop problems as is the case of the pandemic. Correct pronoun usage
which it
Thus
, the condition of the country is endangered so proper measures need to be established for the sake of the nation. Linking Words
For instance
, during the COVID pandemic, governments determined a lockdown to reduce the spread of the virus.
In conclusion, even if we are responsible for our bodies and Linking Words
health
, governments must cover the main necessities of society and look after people's general wellness.Use synonyms
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