In many countries school have severe problems with students behavior. What do you think are the causes of this, what solution can you suggest.
In the modern world, there have
happened
some issues with students Verb problem
been
did
not Verb problem
apply
obey to
the school rules for decades. Wrong verb form
obeying
This
essay will expound on and supply some possible solutions to address them.
To commence, there are two major reasons causing above the problems. To begin
with, it's obvious for
learners who prolonged for long hours at night and turned it out, Change preposition
that
they
did not get up early or went on time to school. Correct pronoun usage
apply
For instance
, some social science experts told
that a lot of younger learners had Verb problem
said
lower-self
control, and were game persons. Correct your spelling
lower
As a result
, it was always to be
late to go to study. Verb problem
too
Moreover
, another problem is bullying among younger schoolers. For example
, some surveys said that there was between a 30 and 40% significant increase per year in peering bullying at schools. The main was caused
that classmates came from different nations and had various cultural backgrounds as they did not find their feet in a new place for learning. Verb problem
apply
Therefore
, this
resulted in many schoolers' bullying behaviour to attack people.
Nevertheless
, although
these issues are serious, there are some possible measures that can be taken. First,
some nations looked like Norway, in which place was so pleasureful and equal for everyone to join gather study. Their curriculum could be fit for each one and their mission was to make students could
learn in a free atmosphere. Verb problem
apply
Hence
, the government should play the right role to engage
educational communities following a good example in Norway. Change preposition
in engaging
Additionally
, the other possible measure is for social workers can hold some events or campaigns for learners to chat with different people like ‘camping night’ due to
finding their feet in the new place.
To conclude
, following the statement above, I believe that student’s behaviour has a reason let the parents search for. If the adults, social workers and the government could play the right roles and find better ways, younger people would be better in the future.Submitted by jimmy.wong.wp on
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