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In the future, all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think that the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Due to the technology development, there will be driverless vehicles on the road in the future,
such
 as cars, buses and trucks. I firmly believe that
such
 transport will bring more benefits in traffic conditions that driven auto.
To begin
 with, the most noticeable advantage is that many drivers do not obey important road rules,
hence
, automated cars will help to decrease a lot of serious incidents on the road.
Secondly
, big companies will not have a need to hire employees to deliver their goods to the customers or stores.
Moreover
, people with disabilities when travelling by car have a lower reaction, so it is suitable for them to have
such
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self-automated
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 vehicle to move somewhere.
Finally
, these days it is common
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that
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 elderly are working as public transport drivers which makes individuals think about the safety of the passengers due to the high risk of health problems of the driver.
In addition
, there are still several drawbacks
such
 as an increase in unemployment in the future because drivers will be replaced.
Besides
this
, it will cost an arm and a leg to repair or maintain
such
vehicle
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 annually.
Also
,
usually
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 all driverless automobiles are electric, so, if it is out of charge customers will have to wait for their products until it is fully charged. To conclude
about
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the aforementioned arguments, I am in favour of the opinion that automated cars will bring more benefits to
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society than drawbacks related to
the
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 effectiveness.
Furthermore
, most companies are working on making driverless vehicles safer for
its
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 passengers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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