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Someplace think that modern technology makes people more sociable while other thinks that less discuss both the views.

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 think that the advancement of automation influences
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crowd for more friendly, whilst others think that it's making them less interactive. In the modern ,era it helps
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masses for making friends from different cultures, countries and religions, and they're getting new concepts and knowledge from them.
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 essay discusses both the ideology in the ensuing paragraph. On the one hand,many masses believe that due to
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 friendly their communication becomes easier
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 they communicate through several electronic gazettes
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, cellular phones,hockey to key and laptops and computers
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 they are connected with e platforms
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,Facebook,Twitter,Telegram, Whatsapp and Instagram with their families and friends at anywhere and at any time without any barriers. ,
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 they are getting different concepts and knowledge of various sectors from them.
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, some humankind believes that due to being less interaction they become more intro Val
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 due to the advancement of machinery they Rob their physical presence,
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, they're facing difficulties while they interact with folk face to face.
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, they make folk like-minded. To conclude, modern automation putting a vital role in the modern era without modern automation humans can not connect
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