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Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Languages
 play a vital role in globalization. Some people think that we should discover new
languages
for increased
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 connections internationally. There are manifold advantages of inventing a new
language
 which surpasses drawbacks.
Therefore
, I will give an explanation in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are a plethora of benefits to inventing new
languages
.
Firstly
, if individuals communicate in the same
language
 over the world, they would develop their business globally.
As a result
, increased countries' income.
Secondly
 folk should invent a
language
 at the international level. They can easily learn about different cultures.
For example
, these days English
becomes
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 a universal
language
 in most countries.
Therefore
, people can learn numerous things by using English.
Thirdly
, new
languages
also
 help in the tourism sector. People do not any help from the guild, they easily
understood
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the history and a particular place without the help of locals.
However
, there are
also
 several drawbacks to discovering new
languages
. Youngstars have good grasping power. They can easily learn new things.
On the contrary
, aged folk face many difficulties
to learn
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languages
.
In addition
, it is
also
 effective
that
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 businesses which work locally.
Such
 as tourist guides, if folk know the
languages
 which communicate over the world. So, folks do not need any guidance to learn about history, culture and so on. English
becomes
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 universal but some countries like France, do not adopt
this
language
 because they think that when they adopt it, it
would be disappeared
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 from their culture and history. In conclusion,
although
 the innovation of new
languages
 gives numerous benefits around the world ,especially in business globalization it leads to advantages more than disadvantages of new
languages
.
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task response
Provide a clear position on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages
coherence cohesion
Focus on creating a clear and logical structure for the essay, including a stronger introduction and conclusion

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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