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Every country should have a free health service, even this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Many countries aim
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mandatory
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 free
health
 care,
although
 there are modern medicines that are not possible to provide because of their much cost. I absolutely
agree
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this
 politic. In spite of nowadays there are a lot of abilities to get an
insures
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 service in
medicine
,
also
 there are many people who
have
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 not enough money to pay fees.
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 it is
a
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 duty of
government
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 to provide the right to
health
 for every citizen.
This
 essay gives the reasons
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such
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.
Firstly
, It is possible that pour person gets into a situation
when
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 he
need
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 some
medicine
 but he has not
any
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 insurance. If there
are
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 no
any
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free
service
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 it leads to
worst
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 of his condition,
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 in coming more
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then
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before. As a consequence, the government have to pay more for saving his
health
 from chronic illness and other fees to support pour are
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 significantly.
Resent
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 survey in
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 Clinic of Astana illustrates that more than 90% of
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supports
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the
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free
medicine
.
Secondly
 in the case when there is a free
health
 service in
country
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 and the
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 man gets in
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 when he needs
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a doctors
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doctors
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 help. The care for him in the
first
 moment of disease contributes to fiver efforts for treatment
compered
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 to old illness causing in
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 decline of
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 of adaptation in common life.
Consequently
,
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wasting
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 of money
for
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 is drastic falls. It has been evidenced by
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 research
of
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 Astana University, that during the latest quarter of
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 the fees to support
in
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medicine
 declines an average
in
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 15% in a year since the moment
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 when
the
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free
medicine
 became. In conclusion, I believe in mandatory free
medicine
 because it
helpless
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 to individuals and by the way at large saves
the
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money and
how
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 a result not too expensive.
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