Every country should have a free health service, even this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Many countries aim
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mandatory
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free
health
care,
although
there are modern medicines that are not possible to provide because of their much cost. I absolutely
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this
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service in
medicine
,
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not enough money to pay fees.
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it is
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duty of
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to provide the right to
health
for every citizen.
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.
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he
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some
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but he has not
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insurance. If there
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no
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free
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it leads to
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before. As a consequence, the government have to pay more for saving his
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significantly.
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Clinic of Astana illustrates that more than 90% of
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supports
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the
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free
medicine
.
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and the
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man gets in
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when he needs
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doctors
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help. The care for him in the
first
moment of disease contributes to fiver efforts for treatment
compered
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to old illness causing in
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of adaptation in common life.
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of money
for
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is drastic falls. It has been evidenced by
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of
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Astana University, that during the latest quarter of
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the fees to support
in
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medicine
declines an average
in
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15% in a year since the moment
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when
the
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free
medicine
became. In conclusion, I believe in mandatory free
medicine
because it
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to individuals and by the way at large saves
the
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money and
how
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a result not too expensive.
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