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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

#people #choices
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Nowadays, it is claimed by several
people
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 that individuals have so many options. I strongly opine with
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 idea because of some reasons which I am going to explain below. In the modern day, habits of
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 and
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 standards changed with the developing technology, strikingly. When it is compared
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 the past,
people
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's requirements to move their life are increased in a visible way. If it is observed individuals who lived in past, their life was so basic. Most
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the
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people
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 were unaware of many things and
people
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 were living to live.
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,
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 had no idea about mobile
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 and the internet approximately 20 years ago and at the present time, tons of cell
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 are being produced daily and more than half of the
world
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 know how to use cell
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 and reach to internet.
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 to
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,
people
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 can choose their own cell
phones
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 from many different models by their own requirements and be able to modify
phones
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 by their own wishes
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 as colour etc.
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, the modern
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 is designed regarding
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young generation's desires. By developing technology, governments and investors are able to take heed of
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 needs from all over the
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 and at the same time individuals can easily reach
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countries' and
governments
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 needs and be able to improve themselves regarding
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these requirements.
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, many young modern students have a number of opportunities to enter any kind of
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,
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, and
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 in foreign countries. The students can choose one of the options by their own wishes and abilities. In conclusion, I believe that choices and opportunities are growing with
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time
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people
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 should think carefully and decide for their own profit while
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 considering our
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's benefit.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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