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In the future robots may do more of the work that is done by humans today . Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages ?

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In
this
 modern era, businesses are emphasizing developing
robots
 for the work that was previously performed by humans. Industries are bringing robot technologies into their production plants, and various service organizations are replacing human activities with computers. Despite having some disadvantages, I believe that
robots
 can help us to attain a sustainable future and quality of life. The main reason for relying on
robots
 is their accuracy to perform tasks. Previously, human error was a big challenge for many organizations.
For instance
, a small mistake by an accountant can result in a huge financial loss for the company.
However
,
Robots
 are performing the same tasks countless times with the same precision.
Furthermore
,
robots
 can save time by doing the work for us.
This
 will result in more leisure time, and humans can utilize their time for scientific research or exploration. It can be observed that nowadays, more students are getting higher education than in the past because our basic tasks are being replaced by
robots
. An obvious disadvantage of
robots
 is the increased consumption of
electricity
.
Robots
 use
electricity
 to operate, and according to a recent survey, more than 60% of
electricity
 in the USA alone is produced by fossil fuels. Higher consumption of fossil fuels releases poisonous gases that negatively impact our environment and habitats. Recent floods in several countries are the result of climate change due to the emission of carbon and other harmful gases. To conclude, I must have to say that robot technology can bring betterment in human life.
Although
,
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 it can negatively impact our environment, we can utilize renewable energy resources to produce clean
electricity
. I believe that the advantages of using
robots
 for our work can outweigh its disadvantages.
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