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Human diet has changed throughout history. How has it changed?  In your opinion, has the change been good or bad?

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, bacterial disease
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such
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cholera
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collected
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 because it is mostly
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sparsely
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advantages
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modern
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technology
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hunter-gatherer societies
  • agricultural communities
  • global trade networks
  • exotic foods
  • industrialization
  • modern farming techniques
  • processed foods
  • technological advancements
  • biotechnology
  • genetically modified organisms (GMOs)
  • lab-grown meats
  • fast food
  • convenience foods
  • obesity
  • heart disease
  • organic diets
  • plant-based diets
  • environmental sustainability
  • animal welfare
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