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Some people argue that climate change has negative effects on business, while other people believe that climate change could create more opportunities to business. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 modern era, people have differing views with regard to the question of how can
climate
change
 affect
business
. In my opinion, both negative aftermaths and new changes can be created in the new
business
 at the same to the previous
business
.
This
,
this
 essay will bring the two views too close. On the one hand, serious negative
effects
 can certainly happen and lead even to closing the
business
.These
effects
 can act as result in destruction in the near cities.For,example green farms will stop producing fruits and vegetables, which means some markets will close down and people
also
 stop eating these valuable products,
in addition
, the drinking water trade will be affected for sure and that will lead to a huge dilemma. We would hope that the
effects
 will not happen and pray for the earth's safe,
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last
 and for our society to move forward.
On the other hand
, I believe that a
lot
 of different businesses will take advantage of
climate
change
 because they will gain a
lot
 of money .There are various types of
this
business
,
such
 as health sectors, that mean a
lot
 of patients who will suffer from the negative consequences of
climate
change
.For businesses with dealing these problems of
climate
change
 for, example the workers who will face these
effects
 and plan to get the negative consequence, the government will for sure rent a
lot
 of businesses to deal with these changes. To sum up, I believe a
lot
 of dangerous
effects
 will be on our faces in the near future,
however
 ,
this
 effect will bear huge opportunities for the new generations that will make them survive.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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