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All pare ts want the best opportunity for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for a children's future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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As Denise Morrison has said,
transparency
 is ultimately the single most defining and vital ingredient to achieve success as it essentially builds trust. In the essence of the corporations and stakeholders,
transparency
 once was viewed from only
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consumption
 aspect, while
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transparency
 leads to entirely something else. The
assymetry
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asymmetry
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 information results in expanded growth opportunities and community empowerment.
On the other hand
, in the essence of the
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sustainability
 reporting
this
 means that the enhanced
transparency
 could lead to improved reputation and not the purpose it is supposed to achieve. Many
corporations
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 reports and statements contain errors or omissions without complying with the specific standards
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 should follow. The experience of studying at the University of Glasgow, with the faculty of Adam Smith Business School showcased
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myriad
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 and reports that were unacceptable in terms of the
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sustainability
 frameworks, even though the companies claimed to follow the standards.
This
 vacancy gives me an opportunity not to just research financial statements, but
also
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 the company in correcting the points it may have missed
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 the whole process of preparing
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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