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A knowledge of maths is not important for most jobs nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#maths #jobs
Maths is one of the nightmare subjects in school times for most kids.
However
 not knowing numerals is not a disadvantage. Most
jobs
 these days are now based on sales, marketing and customer success.,Still there is a lot of emphasis on
math
 because
high paying
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 IT
jobs
 require one to be good at mathematics concepts. Let's discuss both views and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
.
Firstly
,
math
 is based on calculation , and
numerical
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numericals
forms
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 the basis for subjects like accounting , and software development using AI
,
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apply
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 and ML technology . Even data scientists are supposed to be good at statistics and
math
 . For ,Instance App-based companies heavily rely on algorithms to solve business problems. Companies like
swiggy
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, tomato
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and Tomato
 heavily rely on algorithms to solve their business challenges.
Secondly
, there are loads of
jobs
 like customer success manager, sales manager , and
hr
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HR
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 manager which are not dependent on
math
 at all . if you are not good at numerical still you are eligible to apply for
this
 position.
For instance
 , Each and every big corporation has an opening for sales
,
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 and customer success managers. These are high-paying
jobs
 too. So having poor numerical skills are not a hindrance to getting these post. Even in the technology sector there are
opening
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 for people with good communication skills. In conclusion ,
Math
 is not a deterrent to getting good
jobs
. Most job seekers from non-
math
 backgrounds do get high-paying
jobs
 in different sectors. I am of the opinion that
math
 is not at all a stepping stone to getting the job. If you are not good at numerals still you can get high-paying
jobs
 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • automation
  • advanced mathematics
  • critical thinking
  • digitalization
  • software tools
  • mathematical literacy
  • personal finance management
  • logical reasoning
  • data analysis
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