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The diagram illustrates the stage of the factory products instant
noodles
. All in all, it is clear that there are 8 steps of
noodle
manufacturing. Each step can be
catagorized
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categorised
by
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into
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two main stages (raw
noodles
material production and
noodles
packaging).
To begin
, The
manufacture
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provides raw
noodle
materials which
is
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are
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main
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the main
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proceeds in
this
stage.
Such
as Flour
are
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is
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stocked at Storage silos before it is mingled with water and oil in Mixer to produce Dough sheets. Following
this
step, the
noodle
dough will be striped
then
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and then
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turning
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turned
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into
discs
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form. The
last
but not least,
this
step
conduct
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conducts
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the final shape of instant
noodles
by cooking
it
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them
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with oil
,
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apply
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and drying
throughout
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it throughout
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the pan. The
second
main stage is packaging
noodle
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noodles
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, and
get
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getting
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ready for containing. The Discs
noodles
wrap
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wrapped
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together with Vegetables and spices in Cups.
Finally
, The Instant
Noodle
cups
ready
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are ready
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to distribute after it is sealed and
putted
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put
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label
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labelled
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.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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