Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we are no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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modern
life
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advertising has
significant
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role in our
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life
. Some
people
believe that advertising is successful in getting
people
to buy more things, while others believe that advertising is just for attention. In
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I will discuss each aspect and express my opinion. On the one hand, today the number of advertisements is countless. We live in a cyber age where
ads
can just be discovered. Seeing
ads
is not a problem in
people
’s lives because we can see them everywhere during our
life
.
For example
, when many
people
are watching different videos on YouTube countless
ads
can be annoying and annoying. So, many
people
get nervous when they see
an
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advertising
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and quickly skip to other videos. These
people
are a bad influence.
On the other hand
, advertising plays a hood role in increasing the sales of
foods
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. It attracts and makes it easier for
people
to achieve something.
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massage
ads
provide convenience and at the same time are useful for
people
in today’s stressful work
life
.
This
message helps to relieve stress. So advertising plays a food role in persuading
people
to purchase.
In
addition
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some applications
such
s Piscart offer you a 7days
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consumption and it can be an opportunity for anyone who is concerned. To sum up, advertising can be found everywhere
although
it can be unpleasantly normal,
but
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this
phenomenon satisfies
people
’s needs and they purchase willingly. I think there are positive and negatives to
ads
because advertising
make
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me want to be during but sometimes it annoys me.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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