Nowadays many people choose to be self employed,rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? Wht could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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A segment of society believes that in the present
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a number of
individuals
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preferred to do their own work
instead
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of working for any organisation or company.,
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however
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this
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essay will discuss the demerits of the mentioned phenomenon in the upcoming paragraph. To commence with
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statement,In the modern era there are a lot of job opportunities in society.association and organisations give a lot of advertisements for
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the vacancy
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vacancy
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vacancies
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in their company for
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to come and join them.,
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some big multinational
community
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communities
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also
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need significant employees to ruin their big organisation.In research
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NASA found out
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that every
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day there are 200000
jobs
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vacancy
come
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out.Working in
big
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multinational club will provide people
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, profit and funds,insurance,medical,expenses and so many opportunities. On the other ,hand
individual
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individuals
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who
are
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self-employed
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,self-employed
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they
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can earn money every day but they cannot live a good lifestyle as long as they have work
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they can earn money
otherwise
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sometimes they face so many difficulties.
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self-employed they cannot get the bonus every annually.,
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they do not have privileged .whilst self-employed doest does not grow their career progression.
Lastlast
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but not least self-employed
person
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people
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cannot get a stable income. To conclude,Being
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self-employed person
individuals
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have to go through a hardworking lifestyle.but if
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are working in
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the group
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they have to do so much hard work to succeed in their life.
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