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Today People are no longer active and fit as they use to be due to the nature of work nowadays, What are the causes of this? What solutions can you proffer

#people #nature #work
Nowadays, people stopped being active and
got
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 used to electronics. I opine the causes for
this
 are the new world
with
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full of electronics.
Simple
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A simple
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 solution
is control
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. It is perfectly sensible to say that human
being
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beings
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 are
becaming
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becoming
 inactive due to
lifestile
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lifestyle
. Having said that
the
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computerisation
have
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has
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 globalised, economy
have
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has
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 become digital. Residents quit going to
a
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physical activities as there are too many things
attract
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that attract
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 them
in
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to
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 their
gagets
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gadgets
targets
. Following examples can be taken,
such
 as
:
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 workers started working from
home
 as they realised it is possible to
work
 at
home
 remotely with the computer. Another example
to
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this
that
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 he grabs the phone to make a call to his
familly
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family
 or friend rather than
visiting
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visit
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 them.
Lastly
, there are too many fancy cars which attract them so that they can buy them and these cars make them
lasy
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easy
lazy
 because they go to
work
 by car as it is comfortable
fo
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for
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 them. Solutions for all
above
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the above
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as
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are as
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 follows, the companies should make them
to
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go to
work
 not just stay at
home
, If they did go physically to
work
 it would be better for them to be active. He could have walked to
public
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a public
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 station/stop. After getting off the train or bus he could have walked to
work
 as
this
 is a simple activity. It would be much healthier and
effective
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 to see
the
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apply
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family and
friend
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friends
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 rather than
speaking
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speak
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 on the phone.
Peaple
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People
 can not buy cars just for travelling to
work
, they can take public transport to travel to
work
. To conclude,
this
 is much
depended
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 on the person, and he/she should control himself/herself. As per
reasons
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the reasons
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 and solutions
given
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are given
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 above, even
our
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though our
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 lifestyle is becoming digital we have options to choose to be physical like not working from
home
 or
buy
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buying
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 a car to travel to
work
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • inactive
  • fitness
  • workplace
  • technology-dependent
  • physical activity
  • fast-paced
  • stressful
  • unhealthy
  • eating habits
  • motivation
  • time constraints
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