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many people say that a person`s success is a result of the way they have been brought up by their parents

#people #person`s #success #parents
Some people reckon that the reason for
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 victory is
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 impact
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 family background during their childhood. I definitely agree with
this
 point of view. My opinion and examples will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
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On
 the one hand, it is known that for the development and improvement of a person, parenting plays an important role in
this
. Because parents are the
first
 teachers and mentors of their children, who are responsible for the physical, psychological and mental growth of their child.
For instance
, according to statistics, 90
percent
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 of
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 develops at a young age. And
this
 suggests that the child needs to be taught, it is desirable to educate when he is
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a
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 youthful years.
On the other hand
, children always follow their
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 as a role
model
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 in their lives.
Moreover
, most individuals learn life lessons from their family backgrounds. As well as many daughters and sons of the world, usually follow the same path as their parents.
For example
, when dads and moms will work in the field of military forces, their kids will
also
 follow them. He or she will never be interested in art,
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music and other things
which
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related
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 to
this
. Because in their family there is no
such
 person who is interested in the above-listed areas. Ultimately,I want to say that, upbringing plays an essential role in a person's achievements. I totally agree with
this
 statement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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