In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the modern era, convenience is essential to humans, for we are a busy race filled with individuals trying to survive and spend their lives comfortably,
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, businesses are coming up with ready-made products, and fast
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chains. And as convenient as these are, they are equally, perhaps more, as detrimental to one’s health. With concern for our well-being, I believe strict action or enforcement is required. Some
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claim that the government should increase
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on unhealthy products. Obesity rates seem to have skyrocketed in the past few decades, especially in countries housing numerous fast-
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chains. Take America,
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, it has an uncanny rate of obese persons, and so is Mcdonald’s where anyone can buy a burger for a cheap price. If the government raises
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on junk
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, people will buy less of it. As a consequence, restaurants will lose money and eventually close.
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plan may look promising, but may very well lead to a major economic decline.
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, junk
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chains play an important role in the economy, if they go bankrupt, many will lose jobs and won’t be able to afford good
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.
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, forming a paradox. A plan for the citizens to get healthier by imposing higher
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would only circle back to people being unhealthy again due to them not being able to afford quality
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. Which is
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expensive.
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, the plan not only is ineffective but highly detrimental, as people would
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get poor.
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, the government should fund campaigns on how dangerous fast
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is for our health. To conclude, I highly disagree with the statement cited in the prompt. Imposing higher
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on these kinds of snacks, in my perspective is unnecessary and detrimental. Raising awareness of the dangers of convenient
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is enough and effective.
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, if done properly, health problems in many individuals will disappear into oblivion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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