Today People are no longer active and fit as they use to be due to the nature of work nowadays, What are the causes of this? What solutions can you proffer

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Nowadays, due to what
people
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called as '"hustle culture", it is common that
people
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are going through several bustles and
activites
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activities
that
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them
to
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just
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all day during
the
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work hours. It
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lead
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them to have
a
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fitness
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problem.
This
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essay will elucidate the roots as well as the solutions below.
To begin
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, it is already said that hustle culture
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the body
fitness
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of
people
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in
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this recent days
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aforementioned, especially for employees. The 9-to-5 system has changed the way
people
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lives
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live
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and
works
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. It
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also
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impacted by
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the Work-from-Home
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system that
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people
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to sit all day in their house doing their only jobs. It is like
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normal
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that usually happen to
people
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ini
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in
the city area. Unfortunately,
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unhealthy
life style
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lifestyle
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does not
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with some possible solutions from their office that might help. To give some examples,
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, if they have a bunch of money, they might go to the gym.
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offers various facilities that could enhance moves, activities and
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. There is
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possibility
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to get a friend with the same condition, who
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with
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a body
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fitness
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problem
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problems
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.
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instance,
this
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way is more simple and
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.
People
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can try to have a mini training
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their own. Luckily, there is
internet
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the internet
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that can
assists
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them to get a healthy life. They just need to open Youtube and find suitable videos and trainers that can help them to reach their healthy life purpose. One essential thing to point out is
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consistency. Consistency has a significant role to get them towards their goal.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • inactive
  • fitness
  • workplace
  • technology-dependent
  • physical activity
  • fast-paced
  • stressful
  • unhealthy
  • eating habits
  • motivation
  • time constraints
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