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A number of individuals suppose that the most effective way to evaluate children’s knowledge is to pass exams, whereas others claim that it is a hazardous idea and
students
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that students
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 are suffering from tension. From my vantage point,
examination
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the examination
an examination
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 is considered to be the worst approach for
juveniles’
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 assessment.
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 method of understanding the level of adolescents is destructive and leads to burnout and stress. To commence, the system of
tests
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 helps youngsters to study hard during the academic year.
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, examinations promote competition among students,
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, they push themselves to the limits and pass all the
tests
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 with flying colours. Control
tests
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 teach
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us to
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 overcome weaknesses and work on them properly. An article, which was published in a Russian magazine, says that If adolescents studied unsuccessfully, they would not be able to complete exams excellently.
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, a student, who is involved in exam preparation, has strong endurance and
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 to adapt to large amounts of information.
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, there are some people who think
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. A huge number of adolescents are under strain because of the examinations.
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 with, the most indispensable part of the control
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 is
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the fear
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 of failure. It is acknowledged that anxiety before the assessment leads to unsatisfactory results,
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 it is impossible to estimate a student's level correctly.
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, according to the Daily Mail, an abundance of respondents
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 the survey claim that exams do not represent the real capacities of a youngster, and
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 test abilities superficially. (Конструкция not only.. but
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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